Queen with no crown
(2nd Annual Issue Competition Poem)
-Sri sreya kurella
To every drop of tear around her ,
she kept her hands together
to hold ,
where she let her every single tear drop ,
to fall on her motherland .
she grabbed all the broken souls around her into her arms,
where she left all her pain by hugging the air .
she held people around in her heart,
where she carried all the pain in her stomach alone.
she takes in all the attributes of the queen ,
with no crown on her head ,
and all the commitment of a goddess ,
with getting no honour.
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Full name is sri sreya kurella . Studying degree 2nd year. Started writing poetry in telugu language while studying 2nd class. Recently started writing English poetry too . Published a book in telugu during 10th class . Book name : entha bavuntundi oh . Living location is Vijayanagaram , Andhrapradesh.
Very nice lines Sreyaa
So nice……. Nice line’s …..all the best.. Kp doing like this
Thank you so much
Wow … It’s really such a good Poem ..
Excellent 👍
Such an amazing poem😍 Just loved the way you describe it in simple clear words🤩 your short words makes a great difference in everyone’s thoughts… Keep going 🤗 wishing you the very best dear❤️
Nice poem ,keep going
Very nice 👌👌👌
చాలా బాగుంది. Keep it up 👍
చాలా బావుంది
Too beautiful 👌🏻👌🏻👏🏻👏🏻👏🏻👏🏻
It’s very nice message
Excellent❤️❤️❤️❤️
It’s really a good poem…
I’m not much book reader… But I have studied this poem this was really awesome
It is really such a nice poem about a women in beautiful lines. It describes a splendid meaning.
Nice poem keep doing like this and all the best for u r future
That was good. I love the way you wrote keep going ALL THE BEST.
Great poetry.
Beautiful
Wowww it is really soo good.. ur words touched my heart ❤️ this small poem with less words told much more about the real existing goddess i.e the women.. felt very happy after reading this..
This was really a nice poem that I’ve seen…it was really good..
It seems like you are describing a women ..and her magic that she do around us…
You used simple words and neat vocabulary so that we can easily understand the meaning that what u want to convey others ..your doing good and it was a nice hobby just keep going on all the best!
Nice imagery. I don’t know if the subject of the poem is supposed to be a mother , a wife or in general a woman. But the selflessness has been spelled out effectively by the juxtapositions. Some suggestions on the grammar and verbiage though:
i) should use “while” instead of “where” – she kept her hands together to hold, while she let her every single teardrop fall on …
ii) technically the pain left her not the other way round. it can be worded as – while she let out all her pain by hugging the air
iii) with no crown on her head -> but without any crown on her head . with getting no honor -> but without getting any honor